tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post5255790328524482411..comments2024-03-01T00:32:17.498-05:00Comments on Read Write Believe: Poetry Friday: Lai (A Forked Tree) Sarahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12225998457253574928noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-17112933025033260542017-12-03T21:03:55.902-05:002017-12-03T21:03:55.902-05:00I hadn't thought of the cadence as warlike, Tr...I hadn't thought of the cadence as warlike, Tricia...I was thinking of a storm building...but really, it could be the same. Thanks for suggesting this form---it's one of my favs of all we've done.Sarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12225998457253574928noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-69479507522645831202017-12-03T21:02:49.855-05:002017-12-03T21:02:49.855-05:00You know the French and rich food, hee hee. You know the French and rich food, hee hee. Sarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12225998457253574928noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-67524133497525926682017-12-03T21:02:31.915-05:002017-12-03T21:02:31.915-05:00Wow. I like where your mind went with that image. ...Wow. I like where your mind went with that image. Thank you for that, T.Sarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12225998457253574928noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-50652986434324672732017-12-03T21:01:47.941-05:002017-12-03T21:01:47.941-05:00Whew. I'm glad you like the "brazen pig&q...Whew. I'm glad you like the "brazen pig"---that kind of popped up in the draft and I could never bring myself to take it out. I like having at least one item that doesn't fit the dominant metaphor of the poem---kind of like that one weird element the designers say you should use to "finish" a room. Ha. Like I'd know anything about designing. (P.S. I was thinking we are burning down the tree. Sadly.)Sarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12225998457253574928noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-40203725329943857842017-12-03T20:59:35.573-05:002017-12-03T20:59:35.573-05:00Thanks, Kay. I was hoping it might feel like a st...Thanks, Kay. I was hoping it might feel like a storm of words, building. Sarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12225998457253574928noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-31839770844601342432017-12-03T20:59:09.292-05:002017-12-03T20:59:09.292-05:00Thanks, Linda. I hope you try this form---it'...Thanks, Linda. I hope you try this form---it's fun the deeper you get into it. All of us were surprised at how well it worked; there's a reason these old forms feel fresh!Sarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12225998457253574928noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-87982181334152167162017-12-03T20:56:51.042-05:002017-12-03T20:56:51.042-05:00Aw, Mary Lee...THANK YOU. Thank you for reading T...Aw, Mary Lee...THANK YOU. Thank you for reading The Wolf Hour, and thank you for passing it on to your students, and thank you for letting me know about all of it! If I can ever do anything to support your classroom, please let me know. Sarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12225998457253574928noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-56629722492099168432017-12-03T14:19:50.761-05:002017-12-03T14:19:50.761-05:00Wow.
But then, I find myself saying that often w...Wow. <br /><br />But then, I find myself saying that often when it comes to your writing. I gave my arc of Wolf Hour to a student who had galloped gleefully through Adam Gidwitz's Tale Dark and Grimm trio. He loved it. I read it on the drive home from NCTE. WOW. I loveloveloved it. It's in the hands of another reader now...can't wait to find out what she thinks. Thank you for your words. Every last one of them!Mary Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09078793537148794310noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-19018303600188229722017-12-03T07:13:39.179-05:002017-12-03T07:13:39.179-05:00Bravo! I went to Tricia's link for instruction...Bravo! I went to Tricia's link for instructions on this form because I love a challenge....but this one is a doozy for sure. I do love how you incorporated the two fork idea into the poem and the French words. That is super clever and your poem works well. It rhymes in all thr right places and spins a story with style. Manifique!Linda Mitchellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00833034575304594924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-23883730800998909372017-12-02T11:18:36.252-05:002017-12-02T11:18:36.252-05:00Wow! I'm reeling from the sights and sounds of...Wow! I'm reeling from the sights and sounds of this poem!Kayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08210045352610490115noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-19669324382596992772017-12-01T12:03:37.946-05:002017-12-01T12:03:37.946-05:00Wow. That brazen pig, so unexpected in this rich p...Wow. That brazen pig, so unexpected in this rich poem, felt somehow SO right! And split hearts ties in almost exactly with a phrase I'm playing with for a current project, and gave me a whole new metaphor to perhaps play with in that manuscript. Question for you: Is the tree blazing to light the way and show the distance between the paths? Or are we burning down the tree--stupid race that we sometimes are? Or something else entirely? I thought it was the second one, but I'm wondering if that's how you meant it... Love the drama in this whole poem!laurasalashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13807781795919555208noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-62384338021599099362017-12-01T11:49:14.573-05:002017-12-01T11:49:14.573-05:00swords writhe sap from tree
twin arms flaming free...<i>swords writhe sap from tree<br />twin arms flaming free<br />Left. Right.</i><br /><br />I'm reminded of the angels guarding the gates of Eden against interlopers, and <i>Dieu, où est l’abri?</i> is all the more poignant and awful. That first night - for creatures who had never experienced night - and the hope of that first morning must have been awesome.tanita✿davishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01671822274852087499noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-13164497323053845252017-12-01T10:47:00.072-05:002017-12-01T10:47:00.072-05:00You are the ultimate scholar!! I love what you'...You are the ultimate scholar!! I love what you've done here and the French makes it feel so rich...Liz Garton Scanlonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17941516645386392684noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-84002881409129130172017-12-01T07:18:18.387-05:002017-12-01T07:18:18.387-05:00I love that you took the meaning of the word and u...I love that you took the meaning of the word and used it to inspire your poem. You've written a loose form of macaronic verse here (a poem in which two or more languages are mixed together) and it really works. <br /><br />It has a marching cadence to it that makes me think of the military and war. I'm not sure if you meant to do that or not, but it adds something to the theme. <br /><br />I especially love <br />"Our split hearts likewise<br />cry riven! and rise!<br />We fight."<br /><br />Well done.Triciahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18350907653629775293noreply@blogger.com