tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post76213932590140680..comments2024-03-01T00:32:17.498-05:00Comments on Read Write Believe: Poetry Friday: In gratitude for unfinished workSarahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12225998457253574928noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-33818328805344174252020-11-29T23:41:47.601-05:002020-11-29T23:41:47.601-05:00So much to be grateful for. I loved these lines:
I...So much to be grateful for. I loved these lines:<br />I can feel the night collapse<br /><br />to the marrow of the earth,<br /><br />to the well of oldest time. Jonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04299647754479967070noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-6142547022554237412020-11-29T08:03:29.584-05:002020-11-29T08:03:29.584-05:00This poem sinks in slowly, the way a marshmallow p...This poem sinks in slowly, the way a marshmallow puffs when carefully roasted, the way the moon shifts phase, the way we feel our hearts beat in our fingertips--suddenly all the way there with the change barely perceptible. Gorgeous.Heidi Mordhorsthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16496427007514895950noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-865906334430414122020-11-29T06:04:24.160-05:002020-11-29T06:04:24.160-05:00Oh, that second stanza is especially gorgeous! I l...Oh, that second stanza is especially gorgeous! I love the way you structured this poem and crafted such beautiful images.mbhmainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12368641525885104669noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-15676248151889185552020-11-28T23:07:47.140-05:002020-11-28T23:07:47.140-05:00I think you turned your fragment of a poem into so...I think you turned your fragment of a poem into something beautiful about gratitude. Wonderful images. "On the edge of shared winter/ I can feel the night collapse." Janice Scullyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13913934779785635150noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-86343892465945944912020-11-28T19:54:08.713-05:002020-11-28T19:54:08.713-05:00Sara, that's a beautiful fragment, that first ...Sara, that's a beautiful fragment, that first stanza. But that SECOND stanza! Your fragment led you to a real jewel. I feel that one in the hollow of my chest.laurasalashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13807781795919555208noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-20204497027654170482020-11-28T07:35:35.364-05:002020-11-28T07:35:35.364-05:00Before I read Tanita's comment, I was thinking...Before I read Tanita's comment, I was thinking this could be a song! Gorgeous.<br /><br />Mary Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09078793537148794310noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-66324500618786719982020-11-27T13:10:21.319-05:002020-11-27T13:10:21.319-05:00Oh, where is the end of love's reach? What a g...Oh, where is the end of love's reach? What a glorious phrase, this whole poem gives me Leonard Cohen vibes. Your Thanksgiving meal metaphors are also somehow a perfect nod to the spirit of the whole thing. tanita 🎈http://tanitasdavis.com/wp/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-21260953171369683072020-11-27T10:50:21.606-05:002020-11-27T10:50:21.606-05:00I love the food-related descriptions. So good! I love the food-related descriptions. So good! Ruthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12463332371535167975noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-6451926212388886942020-11-27T10:24:59.041-05:002020-11-27T10:24:59.041-05:00So beautiful. So perfectly crafted. Those images. ...So beautiful. So perfectly crafted. Those images. Wow!Carolhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13294455230627182656noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-67046178592907451992020-11-27T09:15:56.034-05:002020-11-27T09:15:56.034-05:00A stunning finish to a 'Once upon a time' ...A stunning finish to a 'Once upon a time' start. That marshmallow, half-moon, earth's mallow and hearts beating are rich and lovely. Gorgeous writing. Linda Mitchellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00833034575304594924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-824466663015731028.post-13427598063408416562020-11-27T09:05:18.183-05:002020-11-27T09:05:18.183-05:00This gives me the shivers, Sara. I wish I'd be...This gives me the shivers, Sara. I wish I'd been able to be as pure in mine. Also, the 2nd descriptive line of each stanza? PERFECTION. I aspire to this sort of appreciation today. Here goes...Liz Garton Scanlonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17941516645386392684noreply@blogger.com